first synthesis example

             Criticism of first example                            




Great headings


INTRO
-Issue is that minimum wage amount is controversial?
-Never includes article names and authors
-Doesn't give support for clear side
-Boring
-Is this in the US or what??? Who would it benefit?
-Does give a clear side however, that it would be beneficial to raise minimum wage.


Body para 1
-Topic sentence: how families are affected and have been affected by minimum wage
-support for argument is a fact from Warren
-Reasoning: the point of minimum wage is help families live above poverty, inflation
-Transitions: wut


Body para 2
-not only families affected by minimum wage
-where's the citation???
-facts without citation
- kids want spending monies
-transition:




Body para 3
-increasing minimum wage is going to be a process, states must take action
-lays out plan over the years
-gives quote from Dayton, governor of Minnesota, makes it relatable to his audience
-NUMBAHS
-federal-----?------> state


Body para 4
-raising min wage would cause unemployment
-contradictory it would cause unemployment but there were 3.9 million vacant jobs




Conclusion
-summarizes everything he wrote about
-not focused

Applebaum and Wolfers

APPLEBAUM


Problems:
     -college students are going too far into debt to get an education
    -education is a right, not a commodity
    -college students will spend their whole lives paying back student debt instead of contributing to help the economy prosper


Proposal:
    -to take off 10 percent of debt every 10 years


Reasoning:
    -college students are our future for economic success


Evidence:
     -$1 trillion in student loan debt


I wanna know more of the specifics






WOLFERS


Problems:
    -he has lil' bitch syndrome

CC rough draft

I am not totally confident about the length of this draft even though it meets the minimum requirement of 1.5 pages. This is a very rough draft. The reason for it being so is because I wanted to make sure I was doing it right.


I have not addressed all objectives. I only gave an analysis for a part of one essay. I did not include a conclusion. So I need to add those.
My transitions suck also.


My peer will probably tell me that I need to analyze both articles fuller. They will most likely say that I need to add a conclusion and a "so what?"


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I'm surprised at how well he reviewed it. He gave some interesting feedback. I just need to lengthen my paper and finish it.

Logical fallacies in vid

name calling- war mongerer


false claims


generalization- how we feel as catholics


red herring- voting for john Kerry?

for and against legalizing organ donation

For:
http://www.theatlantic.com/health/archive/2011/11/why-legalizing-organ-sales-would-help-to-save-lives-end-violence/248114/


Against:
couldn't find one

YO fracking

Don Carns Jr.


What's at stake? (ethos)
Don is a resident of Beans Cove.
He is trying to show the cons of fracking.


What's the focus?
The focus is that fracking is bad for the environment and it should be stopped.




How they be supportin' it?
He supports with examples of how it is hurting the environment. Heavy trucks, breaking the environment.










Scott Cline


Stake?
He is trying to discredit Don saying that its not the fracking that is hurting the environment.




Focus?
to discredit Don and elaborate on why fracking isn't hurting our environment.


Support?
He kind of attacks Don but he also explains how hydraulics works and how it isn't hurting the environment.
He also explains that fracking doesn't cause earthquakes or high radioactivity in fracking's presence.
Says that the long-term benefits of fracking outweigh the short term cons.

Video

Message- we live in a systematic world and because getting food is so easy, we are gaining weight and eating more and more.




Purpose- to show the audience how food is prepared and processed. the workers looked Asian so it shows that our food is coming from other countries. Also, to help us realize what a problem obesity is coming.




Audience- I believe the intended audience was America. I think this because we are one of the most obese countries in the world and we get food imported easily from other countries




Tone- everything was sped up so we could see the progression of food preparation in 6 minutes. that's what kept our attention, because it was short and interesting to see the images. it was interesting how they went through the livestock's lives, from being alive to being butchered and then in our stores. The music was not a happy upbeat music. It was more solemn and influenced the audience in a negative way. There was no narration I believe because they just wanted to present this video to you without influencing you verbally.