Criticism of first example
Great headings
INTRO
-Issue is that minimum wage amount is controversial?
-Never includes article names and authors
-Doesn't give support for clear side
-Boring
-Is this in the US or what??? Who would it benefit?
-Does give a clear side however, that it would be beneficial to raise minimum wage.
Body para 1
-Topic sentence: how families are affected and have been affected by minimum wage
-support for argument is a fact from Warren
-Reasoning: the point of minimum wage is help families live above poverty, inflation
-Transitions: wut
Body para 2
-not only families affected by minimum wage
-where's the citation???
-facts without citation
- kids want spending monies
-transition:
Body para 3
-increasing minimum wage is going to be a process, states must take action
-lays out plan over the years
-gives quote from Dayton, governor of Minnesota, makes it relatable to his audience
-NUMBAHS
-federal-----?------> state
Body para 4
-raising min wage would cause unemployment
-contradictory it would cause unemployment but there were 3.9 million vacant jobs
Conclusion
-summarizes everything he wrote about
-not focused
